Make relevance easy to see
Read for meaning first. Select a highlighted word if you want a closer look.
During review, one member offered a generality about taking good care of expensive things but supplied no action a borrower could follow. Owen asked for a detail germane to the actual handover, such as where to record an existing mark on a case. The first draft had also placed return instructions in a haphazard order, with the final check appearing before the description of the collection procedure. He rearranged the sections around the sequence a member would encounter during an ordinary loan.
The revised page replaced the broad generality with a specific instruction and a small example of the completed condition record. Each remaining detail was germane to a decision or action in the borrowing process, and its location made that connection clear. The haphazard arrangement had hidden useful material rather than merely looking untidy. Reading the guide while handling a sample kit helped the reviewers identify one last gap before the club distributed the document to its members.
Before you move on
Look away from the passage. Can you explain each focus word in your own words?
Original fictional passages for vocabulary practice.